bloodied as many heads as they could
that beat
that block
truncheons
and jailed scores
when you were a boy
intimidation tactics have been on display
we bleed
we burn
with little result
did you have a puppy?
iranian state news could just play
people killed in various cities did not deter
no one followed the antigovernment rally on tuesday
the government will have trouble
well i'm gonna be faithful
digital split
fresh end
to the demonstrations
i'll never let you down.
i pretty much took a lot out...
ReplyDeletebut kept the same words that was 'given'
and then made it into a poetic-ish, blog-ish kind of thing
the end.
What do you think, Uyen? Does the class Dada writing seem too random, or do you start to make sense of it in your mind? Does it start to flow?
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ReplyDeleteit doesn't really make that much sense, but making it a poem or blog-like post.. then i think it starts to flow a little bit more for me. i felt like if i added a lot more words, it wouldn't flow as much for me. so i decided to take a lot more out rather than adding it and making it more jumbled. so there's room for interpretation i guess?
ReplyDeletebut i also changed the lines, like moved them up or down to kind of try and have the same subject i guess. so i guess it makes a little sense to me..i'm not really sure.. lol